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The Subway of Doom, Part One
By Mick Nielson

March 2010--Timeline Year Twenty-Eight
Some ancient Indian artifacts have resurfaced in L.A., that doesn't sound all that scary, does it? Then wait until you find out what that really means...

I liked this one a great deal--a lot of building tension, helped by the "flash forward" opening which tells you straight out something big and nasty is about to happen.

I liked Mick's character development to Fritz and Chelsea, though I did suggest a small change from his original draft: he wrote them getting a puppy. I changed it to a kitten to be a little closer to reality--I got a black cat in Real Life just a few months ago. Who does, indeed, leave the foulest piles I've ever encountered. We've changed his cat food and it still reeks--I guess it's just him.

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I just love that, out of everything else going on in the story, everyone has the most to say about the fact that Fritz's family bought a cat. I now realize what the key is to getting people to read fan fics again... Characters buying animals.

that and poles. remember how happy we were when you pt a fire pole in the GBWC, LOL

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pleas parden my speling but I'm a littel dislexik and can't tipe whel

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Well the poles were LONG overdue, I mean, whats the fun of being a Ghostbuster if you dont get to slide down the Firepoles?! I couldnt be part of a franchise that didnt have firepoles.